1、 1、强调宾语的时候,再用被动语态 虽然长难句能够表明写作水平,但是清晰明了的表达才是关键。例如:硷增浑叶 In the fall, not only did the cows have to be milked, but also the hay was mowed and stacked by my grandfather"s family. 本句不够简洁的原因是本句的重心应该是“忙碌的家庭-my grandfather"s family”,而使用了被动语态后,仿佛重心变成了cows和hay。下面的表达方式是主动语态,相对来说更简洁一些: In the fall, my grandfather"s family not only milked the cow but also mowed and stacked the hay.
2、 1、强调宾语的时候,再用被动语态 虽然长难句能够表明写作水平,但是清晰明了的表达才是关键。例如:硷增浑叶 In the fall, not only did the cows have to be milked, but also the hay was mowed and stacked by my grandfather"s family. 本句不够简洁的原因是本句的重心应该是“忙碌的家庭-my grandfather"s family”,而使用了被动语态后,仿佛重心变成了cows和hay。下面的表达方式是主动语态,相对来说更简洁一些: In the fall, my grandfather"s family not only milked the cow but also mowed and stacked the hay.
3、 3. 避免频繁使用“there be”结构。 例如下面的句子: There were 25 cows on the farm that my grandfather had to milk every day. It was hard work for my grandfather. 可以改为: My grandfather worked hard. He had to milk 25 cows on the farm every day. 更简洁的句式为: My grandfather worked hard milking 25 cows daily.
4、 4. 把从句改为短语或单词。 例如: Dairy cows were raised on the farm,which was located100 kilometers from the nearest university and was in an area that was remote. 简介的表达方式为: The dairy farm was located in a remote area, 100 kilometers tothe nearest university.
5、 5. 用更为精确的一个动词来代替动词短语。 例如下面这句话: My grandfather didn"t have time to stand around doing nothing with his school friends. Stand around doing nothing其实可以用一个动词来表达,即loiter: My grandfather didn"t have time to loiter with his school friends.
6、 6. 有时两句话的信息经过组合完全可以用一句话来简练地表达。 例如: Profits from the farm were not large. Sometimes they were too small to meet the expenses of running a farm. They were not sufficient to pay for a university degree. 两句话的信息可以合并为下面这句更为简洁的句子: Profits from the farm were sometimes too small to meet operational expenses, let alone pay for a university degree.